Respond with your own thoughts to the article in an edited 4-paragraph minimum, formal academic peer
review. At a minimum, be sure to include the following elements:
� Assess the conceptualization, analysis, and synthesis of key research concepts presented.
� Evaluate the extent to which the writer has addressed the elements from the Learning Objectives
below.
� Does the presentation provide a cohesive summary of the assigned concepts with an effective
evaluation of their implications for project management?
� Did the Presenter provide a meaningful academic argument or interpretation that demonstrated fluency
with the material?
� Incorporate relevant scholarly resources in your posting.
Comments and Constructive Criticism
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Comments and Constructive Criticism
Managing Behaviors with Systems
Based on the article provided on the management of behaviors with systems, the writer
clearly denotes the manner in which systems are structured to regulate processes across various
mediums. In his thesis, the writer looks closely at how companies are establishing systems that
can be used to manage employees and drive business (Amadieu, Salmerón, Cegarra, Paubel,
Lemarié, & Chevalier, 2015). These systems in other words, are developed to shape the
behaviors of the employees, with the element of leadership considered as integral. In my view,
the writer clearly synthesizes his information by clearly explaining the concept of behavior
management through the inclusion of systems, a factor that offers a well-grounded explanation of
the concept. Additionally, the article incorporates the use of several pieces of research literatures
that are used to back the thesis. The article in this case clearly indicates the inclusion of several
variables since the concept is based on a single dimension that demarcates one indicator on the
use of systems in the management of behaviors. The author undertakes an integrative review as a
primary method of presenting his findings. In this case, the purpose and the methods of the study
are detailed within the article.
The writer provides a cohesive summary on some of the assigned concepts by illustrating
how systems have the capacity to influence organizational behavior. The writer delves into other
literatures on the same subject and reviews the works of other authors that validate his thesis. In
this, he or she describes the manner in which systems generate behavior that is viewed as either
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good or bad. The writer justifies and provides research evidence to validate his thesis by giving
examples on archetypes that are inclusively incorporated in organizational and employee
performance (Cordell, Grange, & Langdon, 2013). Additionally, the author denotes how
behaviors are generated through the application of the required systems, an effective approach
that can be applied in project management. However, the writer does not clearly give a depiction
on how these systems may be applied in project management.
In viewing the writer’s academic argument and fluency in his writing, it is important to
acknowledge that the writer incorporates some of the research concepts detailed in giving his
audience an understanding on how systems impact organizational behavior. He incorporates
another variable and views the essence of leadership within these systems and the outcomes that
result from the development of such a cohesive relationship between the employees and the
leaders who incorporate systems in changing behavior (Laufer, 2012). The writer interacts with
different concepts to justify the essence of leadership within a system and relates the
measurement systems used to determine the performance of employees.
The writer validates his views on how employees are considered to take ownership of
different tasks within a system with the aim of motivating them towards success. Communication
in this case is described as an essential ingredient in motivating the team (Luntz, 2011). In my
view, the writer effectively uses the element of coherence in giving his paper an academic tone
in as much as there is some room for improvement. One of the fundamental areas that the writer
needs to include in the paper is the application of these systems within organizations and how
they would impact the performance of organizations. Lastly, the writer would also blend his
thoughts with project management principles.
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References
Amadieu, F., Salmerón, L., Cegarra, J., Paubel, P., Lemarié, J., & Chevalier, A. (2015). Learning
from Concept Mapping and Hypertext: An Eye Tracking Study. Journal of Educational
Technology & Society, 18(4), 100-112.
Cordell, D. M., Grange, E. V., & Langdon, T. P. (2013). Practical Planning Concepts from
Academic Research. Journal of Financial Service Professionals, 67(6), 58-68.
Laufer, A. (2012). Mastering the leadership role in project management: Practices that deliver
remarkable results. Upper Saddle River, NJ: FT Press.
Luntz, F. I. (2011). Win: The key principles to take your business from ordinary to
extraordinary. New York, NY: Hyperion
